friendship (looping)
Life's journey's sometimes leaves us strewn across the road, naked without anything in the world to comfort and clothe us. At times like these it is oftentimes our friends who see us at our worst, reach out a hand, and put us back on our feet. They throw a robe around our shoulders and give us a comforting smile and life moves on. Friends sacrifice so much for one another, time, space, even living their own lives to see the other content. True friends come together like peanut butter and jelly, opposites attracting either crunchy or smooth, mixed with sweet succulence that blend to form a mixture heaven sent. I'd say a true friendship is quite like marriage, together as one you eventually find the other and when you do, promises are made to be there until the very end through thick and thin, 'till death do us part. When we are at our very worst, at the bottom of a deep dark terrifying pit, the other is there like a shining beacon of light igniting the flame of hope within our very souls. You become lifted out of the gloom and suffering and onto angels wings, we fly together through the heavens, admist the clouds, hand in hand. Without friends in this world we would all be walking corpses with no beacon of light to guide us along the way, with no reason at all for living, zombies with no purpose, with glazed eyes and cold hearts.

4 Comments:
I like your use of figurative language. There are many metaphore here:
Naked on road, PB&J, Marriage, Dark pit, Shining Beacon, Flame of hope, Flying like angels, zombies
Consider choosing ONE metaphore and focusing on it. Create depth instead of a list. Any of these will work. Consider choosing one and writing a story or a poem that really shows the reader how friendship is like a _______.
i love the peanut butter and njelly description! not only because i LOVE peanut butter, but it's kind of like a universal thing, how well pb&j go together.
i loved this the first time i read it and loved it more the 2nd time! i like how you compared all those things to friendship. i agree with it all! to me when i read this i think you have a great friends who are always with you no matter what.
~Angie~
I really enjoy how, you mentioned life leaving us strewn across the road.
I enjoyed your many uses of metaphors, and details such as "crunchy or smooth". The use of opposites was also nice.
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